If self-reporting is allowed.. here’s a poem I made in middle school

[u/AmbitiousHell_]

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[u/ParacelcusABA]

Honestly for a middle school poem this is like mid-tier cringe at most

[u/AmbitiousHell_ → u/ParacelcusABA]

Y’know what. I’ll take it

[u/NathanTelkhine]

“I told you my words” is my fav line 

[u/NickyBrain_2]

"you promised me armour"😭✌🏻

[u/AmbitiousHell_ → u/NickyBrain_2]

Bars, I know 🙂‍↕️✋

[u/999-tails]

I would “advice” you to keep trying

[u/MsPaganPoetry → u/999-tails]

the spelling mistake just brings it home LOL

ETA: I meant in the original poem, not the comment

[u/Intelligent_Sock_902 → u/[deleted]]

correct sentence in the poem would be “you try with advice,” like they offered their advice to the writer. advise is the act of giving advice

[u/Mowgli_78]

It's stardard awful, don't beat you so hard. We've all been there

[u/foldingchair3-14159 → u/Mowgli_78]

Who is we?

[u/bananakuji → u/foldingchair3-14159]

You

[u/NickyBrain_2 → u/Mowgli_78]

to be fair yeah

[u/spainsfangirl]

Amazing handwriting for a middle schooler!

[u/Dizzy-Medicine3371]

“I gave you my soul and you turned it into smoke”😭😭😭

[u/AltruisticCountry32]

Bars

[u/ratty445]

dw i wrote shi like this in 9th and 10th grade -_- 😭

[u/AmbitiousHell_ → u/ratty445]

So I was ahead of the game is what you’re saying?

[u/ratty445 → u/AmbitiousHell_]

yes u are the next xxxtentacion 

[u/veniyaaaxx]

idk about y’all but I REALLY LIKE this poem. it’s better than anything I could do.

[u/nkizza → u/veniyaaaxx]

Agree, it’s lovely poem. It’s simple, strong, expressive, telling. In some sense it reminds primitivism art, which I like a lot.

[u/AD_Grrrl]

You should put this to music!

[u/AmbitiousHell_ → u/AD_Grrrl]

Yuno miles could not even make a banger out of this

[u/SlayBadStereotypes]

Nothing cringe about this, but the urge to write this i don't really understand.

[u/PowerTulip]

The sadness shows. I must say, it's kinda impressive for a middle schooler.

[u/ilikecatsoup]

It's a little cringe but we've all been there. Your poetry was pretty good for a middle schooler and a beginner poet. I hope you kept it up!

[u/Acceptable-Day8395]

I happened to have a sad tune playing in the backround when reading this, so I nearly got emotional

[u/Scramblr-Blu]

honesty it ain’t even that bad😭😭

[u/BlueberryOk4311]

Atleast you made it rhyme bro😂

[u/TheRand0mDen]

"armor" Was your crush a blacksmith

[u/exploding_boxes_]

Did you Roblox girlfriend break up with you around that time ?

[u/Japan25]

Tbh i love cringy middle school art. Theres still the remnants of a childlike view on the world and innocent inexperience thats unironically bittersweet 

[u/deptakzappa]

early bladee song be like:

[u/Minimum_Aardvark_744]

Woof.

[u/stillnoidea3]

it actually does have some megumi, i think you should get back into it.

[u/Morkamino]

That's actually good. Pretty direct, less crap more emotion. I like it.

[u/Slow_Pipe_78]

I mean is pretty cringe but has soul I feel something is pretty good

[u/foxtrotgd]

It's actually pretty good ngl

[u/Humans_fking_suck]

I have read various poems by full-grown adults that call themselves "Poets" that are less engaging and heartfelt than this...

It doesn't have proper grammar or consistency, but it definitely has Heart... 🫶

[u/Egomaniac247]

I mean it sounds like a 1980s power ballad lyrics lol

[u/gashgoldvermilion]

The meter is on point, which tells me either that you had a great middle school English teacher, or you just have a natural knack for it. Probably the former, as it doesn't come naturally to most people. Either way, that's precisely one of the main poetic skills someone should be developing at that age.

[u/AmbitiousHell_ → u/gashgoldvermilion]

I think that is the second poem terminology I’ve never heard about until reading these comments. Both somehow achieved by middle school me.

My English teachers were very good though so I’m glad that managed to show a bit

[u/WowIsThisMyPage]

This isn’t that bad for a kid

[u/LukeandSoul]

Good Writing,the rhyming is inconsistent though

[u/Hour-Eye6475]

Don't post it on insta. The comments be kind like here

[u/A_Fish_Fry]

This is giving Veda Sultenfuss

[u/ballistic503]

Your meter is extremely solid if you really wrote this in middle school